Self-Editing: First Pass

Edited Version of First Book

Edited Version of First Book by Joanna Penn | Flickr

As a copy editor in my day job, I know that no one can truly self-edit. However, as a novelist, you also won’t receive the full benefit of a professional editor’s attention if you don’t clean up your work first. Especially if you’re a messy first drafter like I am. This is my first time revising a full-length novel, and here are a few things I’ve learned so far.

Three Revision Passes

I haven’t gotten to the second or third passes yet, so for this post, I’ll talk about what I’m looking for in the first pass. Roughly, I’ve broken down revisions into three areas:

  1. Scene audits (determine the nature, purpose, and necessity of each scene)
  2. Storytelling devices (refine setting, character, dialogue, exposition, voice, and others)
  3. Details (polish sentence construction, cadence, and language)

My ideas for what to include in each pass came from a variety of sources, including Writing Excuses and other podcasts, my coursework at university, Fictorian EraThe Creative Penn, SF Novelists, Magical Words, and other blogs I read on a daily basis.

I’ve just mashed everything together here so as to better analyze what worked and what didn’t in the future. The first pass is going smoothly for me so far. So what do I look for during a scene audit?

Scene Audit

Typo on School Sign

Ignore typos like these in your first pass if you can | Typo spotted by Matt Schilder | Flickr

Before the first pass, I took an overhead look at all the scenes of my book using the outline view in Scrivener. If you don’t already know about Scrivener, I highly recommend it, especially during this phase.

I then wrote down a brief synopsis to keep myself on track. And I’ve read that doing so can help you spot plot holes, though I don’t believe I noticed any at that time. (But boy, did I notice some later!)

The first scene, climactic scenes, and the final scene of the novel all have a few extra questions, but here is the basic checklist for auditing every scene:

  • Whose POV and is it right for this scene?
  • What goal, motivation, conflict (GMC) are shown here?
  • Were the char’s reactions believable? Were these the most reasonable reactions? How might they have reacted differently? Why they didn’t do that instead?
  • Is this a Scene or Sequel?
    • Scene: follow Goal, Conflict, Disaster model
    • Sequel: Reaction to previous, Dilemma (even worse situation), Decision model
    • A loud moment or a quiet one?
  • Purpose
    • What’s the purpose of this scene?
    • Does it perform more than one function? (Plot point, char dev, backstory, worldbuilding, conflict, internal conflict, character arc completion)
    • Check plot points for POV protags and make sure they’re big
    • Weave in chars’ back stories, avoiding dumps
    • Does this show a try/fail cycle for this character’s GMC?
      • Yes, but
      • No, and
  • Plot Progression
    • Does it answer questions from previous scenes?
    • Does it ask new questions?
  • Avoid talking heads and white rooms
    • Make each scene do double duty by adding some actions, settings, etc. that help move story forward
  • Disclosure
    • Does the reader have the info they need to understand the crises and climax?
    • Does the reader understand the char enough to appreciate the emotional payoffs?
  • Escalation
    • Can you bump up the tension and conflict?
    • Can you increase the urgency compared to previous scenes?
    • Can you amp up the stakes:
      • mental (thoughts, attitudes, expectations, understanding)
      • emotional (feelings, trauma, misunderstandings)
      • spiritual (beliefs, connections to a higher power)
      • community (family, friends, peers, neighborhood, city)
      • universal (national, worldwide)
    • Is there tension on every page?
    • Does the story move forward in a way that’s both exciting and logical so that it doesn’t feel contrived or flat?
    • Is the pacing slow in any spots?
    • Are more obstacles needed?
    • Was something resolved too quickly?
  • Does the scene itself have an arc?
  • Does the scene end with a hook or a question to keep them reading?
    • End some chapters in cliffhangers to compel readers to continue
    • Action, a char about to reveal a secret, or a dawning realization

 

Challenges

To me, starting with carving out big pieces (deleting and rewriting scenes), then progressing into whittling your way down (working on dialogue, action, setting, etc.), and finishing with the polish (language, cadence, etc.) just seems to be the most logical method and the best way to keep your sanity.

Over the past two months I’ve spent editing The Ageless, I’ve discovered that writing may not be the longest part of this whole production.

Typo

Typo spotted by Andrew DR000 | Flickr

One challenge when doing a scene audit is to keep your hands to yourself. Since this was the first time I’d looked at The Ageless since August last year, I wanted to fix all the terrible sentence structures as I went along. I allowed myself a few weak moments but mostly tried to keep my mind on task.

Only later would I go back and review my notes on a scene, and with the context from the other scene audits, I was better able to decide whether the scene was worth keeping or not.

Many scenes started in a rambling fashion or ended weakly. With the scene audit, I’ve been better equipped to pinpoint why and correct them. For weak endings, that usually just means ending a few paragraphs sooner.

So, since the beginning of March as of the time of this post, I got this far on The Ageless:

  • Scenes audited: 16
  • Scenes removed: 2
  • Scenes rewritten: 4
  • Scenes added: 1
  • Scenes that still need rewritten: 2
  • Scenes that still need tightened: 9

Cover for The Last of the AgelessMy other, personal challenge has been my participation in a critique group. I prefer to hand them something decent to critique, which means I’ve also been cheating and doing the second pass before sending them a scene. That has slowed me down somewhat. More on the second pass later!

How do you stay motivated to keep editing? Do you use three passes? When do you decide it’s good enough to send to critique partners or beta readers?

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